本文關(guān)鍵詞：my favourite sport，由筆耕文化傳播整理發(fā)布。

my favourite sport

    As we know, sport is an important part of our life.I am interested in sport and I do sports every day.
   my favourite sport is swimming. It is a healthy and popular sport and I learned to swim when I was only 5 years old. Although I am a little nervous in the water at first, with the help of my parents and coach, I could swim well after several weeks. Now, I am very good at swim and I go swimming over three times a week. As far as I am concemed ,swimming in the water is cool and exciting. During the summer holidays,I usually go swimming in the sea with my family and we always have a wonderful time.
    Swimming makes me healthy and brings me plenty of enjoyment.

批改：
1. It is a healthy and popular sport and I learned to swim when I was only 5 years old. 這兩句簡單句應(yīng)該拆分,獨立成句更好。去掉and ,換成句點。
2. Although I am a little nervous in the water at first, with the help of my parents and coach, I could swim well after several weeks. 說當(dāng)年學(xué)游泳的事，應(yīng)該用一般過去時。I am 改成I was .
3. Now, I am very good at swim and I go swimming over three times a week. 句型錯誤，be good at (doing )sth.此處swim 應(yīng)該為swimming 。
4. As far as I am concemed 單詞拼寫錯誤 應(yīng)該改為concerned.

參考例句:
(文)善長做某事  be good at (doing )sth

He is good at cooking

作文-地帶點評:
作為初三學(xué)生的習(xí)作，，作者有著比較好的語言組織能力，語言簡潔，選詞精準(zhǔn)，句子表達也相對較標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，內(nèi)容連貫，條理清晰，能熟練使用連接詞，使文章更有整體性，連貫性，這點值得肯定.但有個別句子有語法、詞法錯誤，但只要細(xì)心加勤動筆，相信今后的文章會更長更漂亮！

給 分 理 由:

整體結(jié)構(gòu)完整，句子表達也相對較標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，內(nèi)容連貫，條理清晰，能熟練使用連接詞，如As we know，Although，As far as I am concerned使文章更有整體性，連貫性，這是大多數(shù)學(xué)生還做不到的。但是，兩個句子有語法錯誤，扣分-4；單詞拼寫-1，共扣除5分。
 

  本文關(guān)鍵詞：my favourite sport，由筆耕文化傳播整理發(fā)布。